I quite like the break in rhythm. I want that line to stand out - in my imaginings the bully boy bigger planets are picking on pluto and this is their primary issue - pluto is different to them.
I'm not keen on the 'r' for 'are'. Happy to change that.
Sniff! Poor Pluto.
ReplyDeleteI don't like the "U r not like us". Surely you could be grammatically correct while maintaining the same rhythm and acrostic pattern.
ReplyDelete"U r not like we" perhaps?
ReplyDeleteI quite like the break in rhythm. I want that line to stand out - in my imaginings the bully boy bigger planets are picking on pluto and this is their primary issue - pluto is different to them.
ReplyDeleteI'm not keen on the 'r' for 'are'. Happy to change that.
Nathan - glad to hear your opinion, though.