This is seriously the 11th hour. And 59th minute. Yet we're still mucking around with the meter. Last night I needed to do a fairly substantial rewrite to lose a couple of syllables from 2 lines in each verse.
I'm down to two options for each verse. Thoughts? i.e. vs1X, vs2Y, vs 3Y. I'd appreciate feedback pretty quickly.
OPTION X
My heart delights
that Christ would leave his throne,
and come to earth
to claim us as his own.
The father’s plan
Enter our world as man
God in our form
A child was born
Jesus, Lord through all the ages
God from God and light from light
Came from heaven, brought salvation
Jesus, be my heart’s delight
My heart delights
that God would give himself
Seeking no power,
no honor and no wealth.
What love and grace!
He suffered in my place!
walking for me
to Calvary.
My heart delights
That I can call him mine
My saviour, king -
God from before all time!
Lord light your fire
Become my one desire
My hope and sight
My heart’s delight.
OPTION Y
My heart delights
that God would leave his throne,
and come to earth
to claim us as his own.
O love divine
Clothed in this flesh of mine!
God in our form
A child was born.
Jesus, Lord through all the ages
God from God and light from light
Came from heaven, brought salvation
Jesus, be my heart’s delight
My heart delights
that God would give himself
Seeking no power,
no honor and no wealth.
Walking for me
The road to Calvary,
Bearing my sin
So I am free.
My heart delights
that I can live for him
and serve the one
who freed me from my sin
Lord light your fire!
Become my one desire!
My hope and sight,
My heart’s delight.
sar 2012
I'm Y all the way down - though 'flesh such as mine' might be more strictly accurate ;-)
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ReplyDeleteThe version I've sent off is Y, slightly modified x, Y
My heart delights
that God would leave his throne,
and come to earth
to claim us as his own.
O love divine
Clothed in this flesh of mine!
God in our form
A child was born.
Jesus, Lord through all the ages
God from God and light from light
Came from heaven, brought salvation
Jesus, be my heart’s delight.
My heart delights
that God would give himself
Seeking no power,
no honor and no wealth
What love and grace!
He suffered in my place.
Bearing my sin
at Calvary,
My heart delights
that I can live for him
and serve the one
who freed me from my sin.
Lord light your fire!
Become my one desire!
My hope and sight,
My heart’s delight.
Can't wait to hear it!
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