I wrote this cinquain for my class.
birthday
hooray!
streamers, balloons
celebrate a new year
a new age, one more step closer
to death.
sar 2010
I like this one more.
It seems
That barbed comments
Baited with some small joke
Hook themselves well into the soul
And rip
Sue Marsden
Have a go. 2 syllables, 4 syllables, 6 syllables, 8 syllables and 2 syllables again.
SIMONE!!!! please tell me you didn't show your class the birthday cinquain!!!!! it rips all the joy out of birthdays. Think we need to TALK.
ReplyDeleteOf course I showed it to them! Didn't even consider the kill-joy factor! A poem without some shock value is ... well... boring. But here's another version for you:
ReplyDeletehooray!
streamers, balloons
celebrate a new year
a new age, lots of lovely bright
candles.