Friday, February 15, 2013

Grace awaiting me

Draft One. It needs a chorus. Thoughts?

Grace awaiting me

I will see the world to come
For one has suffered in my place
Now there’s grace awaiting me, awaiting me.
Judgement’s done, atonement’s made
the ransom’s paid, no guilt remains
Now there’s grace awaiting me, awaiting me.

I take comfort in the hope
of the thief upon the cross
For I’m worthy of as little love as he.
Like this man, I won’t despair
and when I rise I’ll see him there
For there’s grace awaiting me, awaiting me.

I will see the world to come
Despite the sin that I have done
For there’s grace awaiting me, awaiting me.
All who call upon the Lord
rise to life with peace assured
There is grace awaiting me, awaiting me.

sar 2013

26 comments:

  1. REALLY like this one. Excellent! There's only one line I'd fiddle with and that's "and when I'll rise I'll see him there". I'd prefer my thoughts at that point to move from the thief to Jesus - especially as the next line is "grace awaiting me". Rather than getting to meet the thief... although I'm sure he will be there. How about something like "Like this man, I won't despair" (don't change that line) because....and I can't write songs so I won't try to.... something that captures the idea that he who pardoned the thief has also pardoned me.... Or anyway, something more directly about Jesus than the thief.

    Did I mention I really really like this one?

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    1. Thanks! Good point. I'll think about that line. I'll wait till I get a tune to do the rewrite though.

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  2. Quibble. I commit sin, I do wrong. Worth losing a bit of jargon in V3L2?

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    1. I had 'deeds' first, but changed it because the alliteration was a bit extreme. Would 'wrongs' satisfy?

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  3. I reckon it's fantastic.

    Thanks already.

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  4. Nice, simple and direct. Is grace awaiting you, or have you already received it?

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    1. Both. I've received grace and am awaiting grace. Thanks.

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    2. Hmm, I'm with Jon.

      How are you 'awaiting' grace?

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    3. "set your hope fully on the grace to be given you when Jesus Christ is revealed"

      1 Peter 1:13

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  5. Love the simple phrases. First line short and arresting. I think 'sin' in lyrics is ok. otherwise we'll end up totally dropping it out of what the saints do together and only ever use 'outsider' focussed vocab. plus 'Despite the sin' s sounds work well.

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  6. I like it! Especially vss 1 & 3

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  7. Love it. I think you're on a roll. How many more songs do you need to come up with?

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    1. Realistically, I probably need to write at least another 10. Then I need to start editing. This one took me 2 days.

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    2. Have you written about how you write songs? I'd be interested to hear about that :) Do you get "inspired"? Is it emotion in words? Do you follow a formula? Is it more just a logical and planned process? Does it start with an idea, maybe a line, then you just massage and work it, expand it to a whole song? etc!

      BTW I also like it, simple but sweet! Only thing for me is V2L3, for some reason flow seems to falter there for me.

      Maybe you can release a book of poems for all those lyrics that don't make it to become songs..?

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    3. I'll write a post for you, Craig. Then you can give it a go too!

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    4. Thanks Simone :) I was going to say that I don't usually drink tea of coffee, so it's not going to happen.. but then I felt inspired this morning and wrote a song :o

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    5. hmm... maybe I better let my family vet it first, before I expose them to public embarrassment..!

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    6. Craig - I'm still waiting for it...

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    7. Ok, it is out there.. just remember, I said I wrote "a song", I didn't say I wrote "a good song" :P

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  8. Hi Simone. I like this! One thing I thought of: the song captures grace we've received in the past and the grace we'll receive in heaven beautifully - I think the song would be a real winner if you could add a verse about the way we experience grace in the here and now, as saved Christians I.e perseverance of saints, standing up under temptation and the grace given to change us into Jesus' likeness. All of which God is doing now in his people by grace.

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  10. Hi Simone. I dont understand the first line. Maybe I'm a bit simple, but I dont really get the context of it and it just confuses me. The rest I like.

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    1. Hey Esther. In the first line I just meant that I'll get to go to heaven.

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  11. So excited to be singing this song for Good Friday this year!!

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